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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian counties living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian counties living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows the
percentage
 of
population
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the population
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 living in urban
area
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areas
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 in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020 and the prediction of the next two
decades
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
percentage
 of
population
 in cities showing an upward trend in 5
decades
 and
would be
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will
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 steadily increase for the next two
decades
.
Firstly
, in 1970 the
percentage
 of people who lived in cities in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 showed
highest
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the highest
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 number at about 30 percent, just over Malaysia. Even though stood at the highest total
population
percentage
,
this
 country showed
fluctuate
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fluctuating
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 development in the first 4
decades
 and Gradually
increase
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increased
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 until
reach
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reaching
show examples
it’s
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its
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 peak which
predicted
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was predicted
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 at about 50%.
moreover
, Malaysia showed a dramatic increase and
predicted
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is predicted
show examples
 to
become
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have
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 the highest
number of
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apply
show examples
population
, reaching more than double in 2040. In line with
this
, Thailand which stood
just
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at just
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 under 20% in 1970 showed
a
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apply
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positive progress and
predicted
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is predicted
show examples
 to reach more than double in 2040,
although
being
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it has
show examples
lowest
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a lowest
the lowest
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percentage
 of people
which
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who
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 will live in
it
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its
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 cities in the next two
decades
.
Furthermore
, Indonesia is the country which has the lowest total
percentage
at
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in
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 five
past
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apply
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decades
, at about 15%, showing a remarkable
percentage
 after 5
decades
 and predicted remain climb up until its peak in 2040, counted at about triple
than
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that
show examples
 in the
last
 5
decades
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, decades with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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