The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
The two pie charts give information about
percentages
of online Use synonyms
sales
which are different sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. As is observed from the pie charts, electronics & appliance Use synonyms
sales
are Use synonyms
most
important retail sectors in Canada but online Correct article usage
the most
sales
Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
apply
percentages
are Use synonyms
the
highest level in 2005.
Electronics& appliance Change preposition
at the
sales
of Use synonyms
percentages
were 35 in 2005 and it was Use synonyms
highest
level but it saw a slight decrease which Change the article
the highest
were
less than a third in 2010. Change the verb form
was
In addition
, Linking Words
food
and beverage sector’s Correct article usage
the food
percentages
were the third Use synonyms
important
sector in 2005. Correct quantifier usage
most important
Linking Words
However
it increased Add a comma
However,
32
% in 2010 and it became Change preposition
by 32
highest
online Correct article usage
the highest
sales
sector. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, video games had the lowest Linking Words
Use synonyms
percentages
which Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
were
18 in 2005 but Correct subject-verb agreement
was
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
incereased
23% in 2010.
Correct your spelling
decreased
Although
home furnishings Linking Words
were
the second highest Verb problem
had
Use synonyms
percentages
which Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
were
25 in 2005, it decreased Correct subject-verb agreement
was
15
% in 2010. Change preposition
by 15
Moreover
, it was the lowest Linking Words
sales
for retail sectors in 2010.Use synonyms
Submitted by svdnruslu on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages, sales with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 6 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
▼