The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
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The two pie charts give information about
percentages
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of online
sales
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which are different sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. As is observed from the pie charts, electronics & appliance
sales
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are
most
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the most
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important retail sectors in Canada but online
sales
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of
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apply
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percentages
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are
the
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at the
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highest level in 2005. Electronics& appliance
sales
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of
percentages
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were 35 in 2005 and it was
highest
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the highest
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level but it saw a slight decrease which
were
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was
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less than a third in 2010.
In addition
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,
food
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the food
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and beverage sector’s
percentages
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were the third
important
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most important
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sector in 2005.
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However
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However,
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it increased
32
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by 32
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% in 2010 and it became
highest
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the highest
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online
sales
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sector.
On the other hand
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, video games had the lowest
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percentages
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percentage
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which
were
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was
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18 in 2005 but
it
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they
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incereased
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decreased
23% in 2010.
Although
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home furnishings
were
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had
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the second highest
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percentages
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percentage
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which
were
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was
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25 in 2005, it decreased
15
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by 15
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% in 2010.
Moreover
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, it was the lowest
sales
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for retail sectors in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail sectors
  • online shopping sales
  • significant growth/decline
  • consumer behavior
  • market trends
  • economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • sales percentages
  • emerged
  • evolution
  • notable
  • constancies
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