The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
The two pie charts give information about
percentages
of online sales
which are different sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. As is observed from the pie charts, electronics & appliance sales
are most
important retail sectors in Canada but online Correct article usage
the most
sales
of
Change preposition
apply
percentages
are the
highest level in 2005.
Electronics& appliance Change preposition
at the
sales
of percentages
were 35 in 2005 and it was highest
level but it saw a slight decrease which Change the article
the highest
were
less than a third in 2010. Change the verb form
was
In addition
, food
and beverage sector’s Correct article usage
the food
percentages
were the third important
sector in 2005. Correct quantifier usage
most important
However
it increased Add a comma
However,
32
% in 2010 and it became Change preposition
by 32
highest
online Correct article usage
the highest
sales
sector. On the other hand
, video games had the lowest percentages
which Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
were
18 in 2005 but Correct subject-verb agreement
was
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
incereased
23% in 2010.
Correct your spelling
decreased
Although
home furnishings were
the second highest Verb problem
had
percentages
which Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
were
25 in 2005, it decreased Correct subject-verb agreement
was
15
% in 2010. Change preposition
by 15
Moreover
, it was the lowest sales
for retail sectors in 2010.Submitted by svdnruslu on
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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