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The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at rhree health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at rhree health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
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The table shows how patients
are evaluated
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 their
health
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 at
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service
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a service
the service
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centre
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 in
differents
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different
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service
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centers
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. I will explain in detail in the
folllowing
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following
 paragraphs.
Firstly
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, there are three
health
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service
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centre
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centres
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 namely
longston
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,
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peveril
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,
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and marchbank
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marchbank
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march bank
 centres. They provide
different
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 aspect of services and they are booking appointments. doctor's
service
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, care of children, pharmacy,
response
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 to concerns respectively.Here 1 denotes very poor
health
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 and 10 denotes excellent
health
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paients
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patients
have
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. In
Peveril
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centre
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 booking appointments are more
that is
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 9.1%
whereas
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marchbank
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march bank
centre
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 has 7.8% and
longston
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Langston
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centre
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 has 5.2 % .Response to concerns
are in
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is
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 less in
Longston
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Langston
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centre
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that is
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 4.3% which is
least
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the least
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 compared other two. In care of children Marchbank
centre
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 stands second and
longton
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centre
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 is 6.3%. In
pharmacy
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pharmacy,
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 the
sevice
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service
 is good in all three centres. Doctor's
service
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 is good in
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the peveril
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peveril
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centre
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. The
overall
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serives
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services
 are good in
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peveril
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centre
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 which is 8.3%
whereas
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other
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others
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 are less 7.2% and 5.8% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, whereas".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words health, service, centre, peveril with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "denotes" was used 2 times.
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