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Cricket has become more popular than the national sports in many subcontinental countries. What do you think the reason behind this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Cricket
 is a kind of bat-and-ball
sport
, which
was
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 basically the national
sport
 of countries like India.
However
, it has been increasingly becoming more popular in some
othe
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other
 countries including, the UK, Australia, and South Africa.
This
 essay discusses the grounds behind
this
 phenomenon.
To begin
 with, the advancement of technology
like
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is the main factor. The advent of live broadcasts and streaming services.
For instance
, Sky Sports and Star Sports provide extensive coverage of
cricket
 matches.
Therefore
this
sport
 is growing to be more reachable and
audience
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 can watch games and expert analysis.
Additionally
, social platforms
such
 as Instagram and X allow people to follow their favourite players and teams,
participating
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 in live chats and share
cricket
contents
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content
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. Another reason is that globalisation has provided
the
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businesses with the
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 to invest their money
on
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in
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 any growing entity outside the borders. enormous sponsorships and marketings in the
cricket
tournoments
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tournaments
tournament
. Large companies
such
 as Nike and Vivo invest huge amounts of money in
tournoments
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tournaments
 and teams, which will make
this
sport
 more visible and appealing through high-profile advertising campaigns.
Moreover
, the sponsorship of
Coca-Cola's
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Coca-Cola
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,
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 associated the
sport
to
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with
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the
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well-known brands, which promoted the
sport
 globally. In conclusion, a number of
facts
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factors
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such
 as technology and sponsorships
has
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have
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 led
cricket
 to become more popular than some
of
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national
sport
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sports
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 in some subcontinental countries.
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Specific examples, like the mention of Sky Sports and Nike, strengthen your argument.

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