the table shows data about underghround railway systems in six majhor cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger nuymbers per year in millions.
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The table below depicts **information** about underground tramways in six core cities, consisting of the opening date, distance operated, and the number of users every year. The units are years,
kilometers
, and millions, respectively.
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kilometres
Overall
, it is evident that although
opened sooner than Paris and London, Tokyo's underground systems accounted for the largest quantity of passengers. Meanwhile, Kyoto and Los Angeles' formations were operated last
, which showed mere customers.
Initially
, despite the fact that underground railway systems possessed by the London government opened in 1863 and operated around 394 kilometers
, attracting only 775 Change the spelling
kilometres
million
users—less than the 416 million
users of Paris, which opened in 1900 and ran 199 kilometers
. It can be seen that equivalent figures appeared in Tokyo's tramway, which ran 27 years earlier than Paris and operated only 155 Change the spelling
kilometres
kilometers
, attracting up to 1928 Change the spelling
kilometres
million
customers.
Moving onto the remaining statistics, it can be observed that Washington DC's subway, established in 1976 with 45 million
passengers and a 126-kilometer route, whereas obtaining
triple the number of customers of Washington formation. Kyoto subway solely ran 11 Wrong verb form
obtained
kilometers
and opened in 1981. Change the spelling
kilometres
Finally
, after 20 years when the formation subway of DC ran, the same systems in Los Angeles were established which finished a distance of 28 kilometers
and accounted for 50 Change the spelling
kilometres
million
users per year.Submitted by bsphongplg on
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