the table shows data about underghround railway systems in six majhor cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger nuymbers per year in millions.

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, and millions, respectively.

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opened sooner than Paris and London, Tokyo's underground systems accounted for the largest quantity of passengers. Meanwhile, Kyoto and Los Angeles' formations were operated

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, which showed mere customers.

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, despite the fact that underground railway systems possessed by the London government opened in 1863 and operated around 394

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, attracting only 775

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users—less than the 416

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users of Paris, which opened in 1900 and ran 199

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. It can be seen that equivalent figures appeared in Tokyo's tramway, which ran 27 years earlier than Paris and operated only 155

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, attracting up to 1928

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customers. Moving onto the remaining statistics, it can be observed that Washington DC's subway, established in 1976 with 45

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passengers and a 126-kilometer route,

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triple the number of customers of Washington formation. Kyoto subway solely ran 11

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and opened in 1981.

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, after 20 years when the formation subway of DC ran, the same systems in Los Angeles were established which finished a distance of 28

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and accounted for 50

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users per year.

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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.