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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.
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The table provides data for eight different ways of
traveling
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travelling
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 in England in 1985 and 2000.
First,
people walked and bicycled less in 2000
compare
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compared
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 to 1985, as
distance
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the distance
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 in
miles
 per person reduced from 255
miles
 to 237
miles
 and from 51
miles
 to 41
miles
 respectively.
Second,
distance
 in
miles
 in all motor
vechicle
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vehicle
 modes of
transports
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transport
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 increased from 1985 compared to 2000, with
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the exeption
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exeption
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exception
 of
local
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the local
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 bus option, which decreased from 429
miles
 to 274 .
Interesting
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,
that
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apply
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the usage of
taxi
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taxis
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,
although
 tripled in showing years, remained
only
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at only
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 1%
compare
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compared
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 the the most common way of travelling -
cars
.
In addition
, the
long
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long-distance
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distance
 bus became more popular as well, more than doubled from 1985 to 2000, from 54
miles
 to 124
miles
.
Finally
, the most used mode of transportation
were
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was
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cars
.
An
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The
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 average
distance
 in
miles
 per
peron
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person
 who
drived
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drove
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 the
cars
 accounted for 3199
miles
 and 4806
miles
 in 1985 and 2000 respectively.
Overall
, during the
showen
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show
15-years
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15-year
 period of time, people
traveled
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travelled
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 more, and they used more
cars
 and other
motore
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motor
vechiles
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vehicles
 way of transportation,
however
, less walked or
cicycled
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cycled
bicycled
 and less used the local buses.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words distance, miles, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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