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The graph below provides information on the nuber of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.

The graph below provides information on the nuber of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.
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The line graph compares the
number
 of pupils from 3 countries ( US,UK,Australia) , who
educated
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 in different countries over a
period
 of 5 years from 2002 to 2007.
It is clear that
 the US has by far the highest
number
 of international
students
 over the
period
 shown .
while
 ,
Australian
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Australia
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experinced
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experienced
experience
 the lowest
number
 of
students
 ,
who
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they
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studied in other countries. In
further
 detail,
the
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period
 from 2002 to 2004 the US saw
markedly
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decrese
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decrease
decreased
,
whereas
Austrlia
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Australia
 and the UK remained steady
as
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 30000 and 10000 respectively. moving into the
period
 between 2004 to 2007 , we can notice a rise
of
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number
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 of American
students
 and
Biritish
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British
students
 saw a
considerably
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 decrease.
Austrlia
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Australia
 remained relatively stable over the
period
 shown at 10000
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, period, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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