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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate several reasons why
people
 choose
bicycle
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a bicycle
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 or car to get to
work
. In general, each has five different reasons and the proportions are varied. On the one hand, about one-third of the
people
 cycling to
work
 are caring
their
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about their
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 health and fitness,
while
 another one-third are considerate of making less pollution. Only 15% of the
bike-riders
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bike riders
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 choose to cycle because they have no problems with parking, and 13% like to cycle as they don't have to pay for commuting devices.
Last
, 12% of the
people
 who cycle think that cycling is faster than driving a car.
On the other hand
, up to 40% of the drivers think it is the most comfortable way to get to
work
. One-fifth of the drivers think it is better to drive because the distance to
work
is
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apply
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matter
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matters
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.
Otherwise
, 14% of the
driver
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drivers
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 consider the car
is
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to be
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 faster than the bicycle,
while
 another 14% think that they need cars to bring things to
work
.
Finally
,
people
 who think driving is safer than cycling
acounted
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accounted
 for 11% of the drivers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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