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The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.

The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.
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The maps depict the significant alterations in a town from 1990 to 2010 following the construction of a hydroelectric power
dam
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. These changes reflect both the benefits and environmental impacts of
such
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 a development. In 1990, the area was characterized by its natural landscape. To the west of the river, dense forests, ancient structures, and habitats for rare plants and animals dominated the scenery.
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, there were irrigated farmlands and villages, emphasizing a primarily agrarian and nature-oriented lifestyle. The eastern side of the river was
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 dotted with mountains and villages. By 2010, the landscape had been dramatically transformed
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 the hydroelectric power
dam
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. The most prominent change is the creation of a large
lake
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, which submerged significant portions of the forest, ancient structures, and farmland.
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lake
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 is now used for water-based activities,
such
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 as boating and fishing, indicating a shift towards recreation and tourism. The
dam
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 itself, located towards the
center
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 of the map, is now a crucial infrastructure for electricity generation. The construction of the
dam
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 brought about infrastructural developments, including the establishment of a hotel to the northeast, likely catering to tourists and visitors attracted by the
lake
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 and new activities. Villages were relocated to accommodate these changes, and some appear closer to the new
lake
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, suggesting a shift in the town's economic and social focus.
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, the transformation from 1990 to 2010 highlights the substantial impact of the hydroelectric power
dam
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 on the town.
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 it introduced modern amenities and opportunities for recreation and tourism, it
also
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 led to the submersion of natural habitats and agricultural areas, reflecting the complex trade-offs between development and environmental preservation.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dam, lake with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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