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in many coutries, people do not recycle waste materials, such as bottles and newspaper. What are the reasons for this? what could be done to this problem?

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Recycling
waste
 materials like plastic and paper is still not a priority in most countries.
However
,
this
 practice is important to
be
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address as it will impact the world we live in.
This
 essay will discuss why
people
 are still not recycling
waste
 material and how to encourage
people
 to do it. There are several reasons why
people
 are still ignorant about implementing
this
 habit, ranging from internal to external factors.
First,
people
 are still unaware of the impact and or the benefit of recycling their
waste
 material.
Moreover
, they’re not yet educated enough on how to do it.
Second,
there are still few available facilities that would drive
people
 to do it easily
such
 as public trash bins in their
neighborhood
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 that don't facilitate them to divide their
waste
 based on category but
instead
 mix them up together. These
then
 resulted in
the
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 low number of
people
 who are willing to do it, yet we should start to address
this
 problem immediately to protect our earth. To solve
this
 problem, there are
few
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 approaches that can be done.
First
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 is to develop a campaign awareness about it which includes the reason why
people
 should do it and a tutorial on doing it.
This
 can be done in the smallest organization in
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a household.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, it is
also
 important for a neighbourhood to have a commune area where there are several different trash bins so that
people
 can throw their rubbish
accordingly
. By not having
this
,
then
what
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their effort will be a
waste
.
To conclude
, it is
due to
 the lack of awareness and the lack of supporting facilities that
prevents
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people
 from doing it.
Hence
 It's important to
further
continue
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 educate the community on the importance of
this
 action and to provide a facility to accelerate it. I believe that if these solutions are implemented we could save our earth
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task achievement
You can provide more specific examples or case studies to make your argument stronger. For example, mention a country or city that has succeeded in promoting recycling and what measures they took.
coherence cohesion
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task achievement
The essay shows a good understanding of the topic and presents clear ideas.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-constructed, providing a clear start and end to your argument.
coherence cohesion
The logical flow of the essay is quite good, making it easy to follow your reasoning from one point to the next.

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When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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  • to illustrate
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycle
  • waste materials
  • bottles
  • newspaper
  • awareness
  • education
  • environmental impact
  • benefits
  • infrastructure
  • collection services
  • incentives
  • reward programs
  • participation
  • cultural factors
  • common practice
  • influencers
  • community leaders
  • social media campaigns
  • economic barriers
  • subsidies
  • financial incentives
  • government policies
  • regulations
  • practices
  • user-friendly
  • accessible
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