The diagram below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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a public park which it been built the first was

opening

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opened

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in 1920 and now the

some

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same

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park.

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, It can be seen those of many

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new

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facility

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facilities

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then

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previously, Today there are some replaced that

it has

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have

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been built

modern

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area

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. Look

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details, Starting from

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Eldon Street

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infront

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in front

Fountain in 1920 but it has been

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by Rose

Garden

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right side has been Glasshouse.

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they have

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changed Water Feature in front of

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underground car park. Via

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Arlond Avenue right beside Rose

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and Pond water plants in 1920.

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beside Rose Seat and Rose

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in past but it has been Removed Currently.

Stage

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for

musican

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musician

left beside Foutain in 1920 but it has been replaced by

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Amphitheatre

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in front of the

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building

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romoved

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removed

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rose

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2Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

164 words

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Varied vocabulary

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