The diagram below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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a public park which it been built the first was

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in 1920 and now the

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park.

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facility

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previously, Today there are some replaced that

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been built

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changed Water Feature in front of

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underground car park. Via

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and Pond water plants in 1920.

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