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The process below shows how drinking water is made using solar power. Write a report for the university lecturer describing the information given below.

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The process illustrates how drinking
water
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 is produced with the use of solar energy.
It is clear that
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 the process of making drinkable
water
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 involves 5 main stages as pointed out below. It begins when energy from sunlight is collected and ends with taking the
water
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 produced for use. The first
stage
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 commences when solar energy is accumulated using a solar panel and
then
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 it is transformed into electricity. Next comes the second
stage
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, in which a pump running on electricity is used to force natural
water
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 up a pipe.
This
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 pipe connects the pump with a filter, whose function is to purify natural
water
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, making it drinkable. After the purification
stage
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 is the storage
stage
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, where decontaminated
water
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 is stored in a tank placed
upon
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 a wooden platform. Clean
water
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 can be drawn from
this
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 tank for different purposes like drinking or cooking, and
this
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 brings the process to an end.
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task achievement
Your report is clear and covers all the essential stages of the process. However, you could enhance your introduction and conclusion by offering a bit more detail or summarizing the overall purpose of the process.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each stage flows smoothly to the next by using appropriate linking words and phrases. For example, introducing the different stages sequentially can better guide the reader through the process.
task achievement
The stages of the process are described accurately and logically.
coherence cohesion
Your essay effectively outlines the fundamental procedure from start to finish.
coherence cohesion
The use of transitional words like 'first stage' and 'next' helps in maintaining a clear sequence.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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