The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
First
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you see
tow
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two
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charts the line and pie chart below
show
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shows
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information on
crime
in the UK
the
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in the
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last
year , The relationship between age and
crime
,
form
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from
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0 until 8 the is no number of
crime
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crimes
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,
its
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beginning from 12 ,and the
rate
of
crime
the
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at the
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age
20
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high
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rate
all the
last
year , if you
looking
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at the chart you will see the
rate
stare low when age got older ,the range
crime
people
its
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between 12-40 years old ,and the higher
rate
in the twenties until 28 ,in the twentieth
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about 80%. And when we looked at the char of types of
Crime
in the UK
its
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about less half violent
crime
about 46%, and the
less
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type
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is
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public order
crime
its about 9%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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