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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
First
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First,
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 you see
tow
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two
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 charts the line and pie chart below
show
Change the verb form
shows
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 information on
crime
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 in the UK
the
Change preposition
in the
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last
Linking Words
 year , The relationship between age and
crime
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 ,
form
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from
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 0 until 8 the is no number of
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crime
Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
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,
its
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it
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 beginning from 12 ,and the
rate
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 of
crime
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the
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at the
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 age
20
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of 20
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high
Add a missing verb
was high
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rate
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 all the
last
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 year , if you
looking
Wrong verb form
look
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 at the chart you will see the
rate
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 stare low when age got older ,the range
crime
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 people
its
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it's
it is
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 between 12-40 years old ,and the higher
rate
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 in the twenties until 28 ,in the twentieth
its
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it's
it is
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 about 80%. And when we looked at the char of types of
Crime
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 in the UK
its
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it's
it is
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 about less half violent
crime
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 about 46%, and the
less
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lens
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 type
its
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is
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 public order
crime
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 its about 9%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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