The chart below shows the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008

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bar charts compare the differences in the quantity of people's

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expenditure in a specific European country on various goods and amenities in 1958 and 2008. Units are measured in percentage.

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, it can be seen that entertainment, food, and clothing have a downward trend.

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, the other categories show significant growth. Looking at the figures in

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detail, in terms of clothing, from 1958 to 2008, it remained relatively stable throughout

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timeframe, though there were some slight shifts.

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, entertainment halved from 13 per

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in 1958 to 6 per

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in 2008.

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, food has the biggest changes in which the data declined dramatically from 32 per

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to 12 per

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timeline. Turning to the remaining services, housing, travel, and luxury items declined to the same value of around 10 per

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, the data made up 8 per

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, 22 per

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, and 7 per

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in 1958 and 17 per

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, 32 per

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, and 17 per

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, respectively

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The chart below shows the proportion of people's total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Do we have to plan for future or stay focused on our present what is your opinion and why ? provide example to support your stand.