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The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men & women per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men & women per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the working hours of
men
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 and
women
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 on a weekly basis in Australia for the year 2007.
Overall
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, people belong to the 30 to 50
age
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 category dominated throughout the period.
Besides
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,
women
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 showed more interest in work than
men
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 at the beginning from 0 to 20.
Firstly
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, 5% of
men
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 only worked at 0 to 10
age
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whereas
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 15% of
women
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 did more work.
Secondly
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, among 10 to 20
age
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 group followed the same trend as well, depicting
women
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 with higher involvement than
men
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 with 23% and 13% respectively.
However
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, youngsters who fall under 30 to 50 people are working more compared to the rest of the
age
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 group with
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leadingat
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leading
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 8% than
women
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. Next comes the 60 to 80
age
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 group with
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 discernible difference in working hours between both.
Furthermore
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, over 80 people have an equal amount
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 10 % of working hours.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, age with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • Hours worked
  • Overall trend
  • Significant differences
  • Similarities
  • Peaks
  • Full-time
  • Part-time
  • Overtime
  • Proportion
  • Represented
  • Categories
  • Variations
  • Societal roles
  • National employment policies
  • Predominantly
  • Engaging in
  • Comparison
  • Domestic duties
  • Employment trends
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