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The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men & women per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men & women per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Diagram illustrates
number
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a number
the number
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 of
hours
Use synonyms
 worked by
citizen
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citizens
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 of Australia per week in 2007.
Overall
Linking Words
,
a
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apply
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people
of
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apply
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working in Australia with
a working
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working hours
a working hour
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hours
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 about 30-50 is fully dominant if we
compares
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compare
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 with others
number
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a number
the number
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 of
hours
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 worked. As an Information, a
men
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man
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 with working
hours
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 about 0-10
hours
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 was a little
numbers
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number
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 that a men with working
hours
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 10-20 above.
In addition
Linking Words
, a
women
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woman
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 with
a working
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working hours
a working hour
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hours
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 over 80
hours
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 has a lower percentage than a woman who
have
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has
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 a
works
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work
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 number below
than
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apply
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80
hours
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • Hours worked
  • Overall trend
  • Significant differences
  • Similarities
  • Peaks
  • Full-time
  • Part-time
  • Overtime
  • Proportion
  • Represented
  • Categories
  • Variations
  • Societal roles
  • National employment policies
  • Predominantly
  • Engaging in
  • Comparison
  • Domestic duties
  • Employment trends
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