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Writing Task 1 The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men & women per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Writing Task 1 The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men & women per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Diagram illustrates
number
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a number
the number
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 of
hours
 worked by
citizen
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citizens
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 of Australia per week in 2007.
Overall
,
a
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apply
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people
of
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apply
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working in Australia with
a working
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working hours
a working hour
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hours
 about 30-50 is fully dominant if we
compares
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compare
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 with others
number
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a number
the number
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 of
hours
 worked. As an Information, a
men
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man
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 with working
hours
 about 0-10
hours
 was a little
numbers
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number
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 that a men with working
hours
 10-20 above.
In addition
, a
women
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woman
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 with
a working
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working hours
a working hour
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hours
 over 80
hours
 has a lower percentage than a woman who
have
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has
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 a
works
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work
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 number below
than
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apply
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80
hours
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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