The bar chart showed the percentage of school children learning to play four different musical instruments (violin, guitar, piano, drums) in 3 years 2005, 2010, 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart showed the percentage of school children learning to play four different musical instruments (violin, guitar, piano, drums) in 3 years 2005, 2010, 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the proportion of students who learned to play four various musical instruments, including
fiddle
,
guitar
, grand piano and drums in the years 2005,2010 and 2015. In 2015, it was clear that the most popular instrument among pupils was the
guitar
,followed by the piano as the second most common interest among them.
while
the lowest interest ratio belongs to
fiddle
over the given period
According to
the most favourite instruments, which were grand piano and
guitar
, the rate for keyboard lovers was slightly higher at the beginning with approximately %11 and in the following year, it remained the same.
Although
Correct word choice
However
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, in 2015,
guitar
players overtook their instrument counterparts and reached a peak of roughly %40, followed by their colleagues with almost %38. Turning to other instruments, the number of students who love to play the drums gradually decreased over the period and reached %5
at the end
.
In contrast
, there was a rising desire for
fiddle
over the given period.
fiddle
fans were almost %5 at the beginning, but they reached %8 in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fiddle, guitar with synonyms.
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