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Social media have a negative impact do you agree or not

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nation
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 think that social
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have
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malignant
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 effect on youth.other
people
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 think social
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are
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 crucial for our lives today. In my
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 I think social apps have brought the worst to humanity today. In the beginning, social
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 trends influence
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specially
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users
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 from Generation Z,to mimic what they watch on
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social
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.If a famous influencer has done something unacceptable,young
people
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 will mimic it.A prominent example is TikTok where
people
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 try to mimic any kind of videos that they see so that they can be a trend.
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 are hungry for both pride and attention and these kinds of traits were absent before social
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.
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,most of content on the social
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 is uncensored.When youth or children watch that kind of content without any restrictions, it affects their behaviour for the worse.
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,some influencers are invading social
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 with false news which can affect
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public opinion for their purpose.What can be said is that without restrictions on content,
people
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 could spread hate and violence easily.
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,the more youth depend on social
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 the more it is very hard for them to get rid of it. In conclusion,
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 essay has shown why social
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 have a negative impact on both behaviour and using false information can shift
people
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's opinions for the worse,I think
people
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 must focus more on spending their time on useful things like developing new skills
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 of wasting their time on social
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 and it is the obligation of authorities to find ways to restrict social
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 and
censore
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censored
censor
 what appear to
users
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 on social
media
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.

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Make your main points and arguments clearer by elaborating more on each of them. Use more specific examples and evidence to support your claims. This will demonstrate a deeper understanding of the issue and strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which frame the discussion well.
task achievement
The essay addresses the task prompt directly and provides relevant points on the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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