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The map below is of the town Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows possible sites for the supermarket.
The map illustrates Garlsdon
town
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, where a new supermarket is planned to be built. There are
two
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 potential places for the supermarket to be allocated. Garlsdon is the biggest of the towns on the map, with a
town
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centre
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 with no traffic zone, housing,
two
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 industrial zones and surrounded by countryside. There are three main roads that come from its
centre
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 to the three smaller towns: Cransdon to the southeast, Bransdon to the southwest and Hindpn.
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, there is a railway that crosses the
town
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 from southeast to the northwest through the
town
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centre
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 area. The first
option
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 for the supermarket is in the countryside area, northeast
to
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 the
town
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, just between the main road to the Hindon and the railway. The second
option
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 is in the
town
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centre
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, near the railway, approximately in the middle of the area.
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,
option
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 one is located in the countryside, and looks less convenient to arrive,
while
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option
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two
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 is in the middle of the map and looks closer for people to arrive,
however
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,
option
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two
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 has limitations in transport access,
due to
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 traffic zone,
although
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 both options
has
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 access to the train.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, two, centre, option with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • residential area
  • transportation infrastructure
  • accessibility
  • environmental impact
  • green space preservation
  • noise pollution
  • local wildlife
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • boost to local businesses
  • property values
  • competitive landscape
  • consumer choice
  • community feedback
  • stakeholders
  • support
  • opposition
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