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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates how many male and female
students
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 were studying full-time and part-time in Britain during the years 1970/1, 1980/1 and 1990/1.
Overall
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, the number of
students
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 in full-time
education
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 increased over
this
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 time. With regard to part-time
education
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, there was a steady increase in
women
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 choosing to study part-time but for
men
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, the level fluctuated. Between the academic periods 1970/1 and 1990/1, the figures for
men
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 studying full-time grew in steady increments, beginning at 100,000 in 1970/1 and rising to nearly 300,000 in 1990/1. For
women
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, the numbers had
also
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 risen to around 300,000 by 1990/1 on an increasing trend. Notably,
however
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, the figure for females in full-time
education
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 in 1970/1 was roughly half that of
men
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, showing a greater take-up than
men
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 between 1970/1 and 1980/1. A different pattern is shown for part-time
education
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. The graph reveals a steady increase in
women
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 engaged in part-time study, rising from 750,000 in 1970/1 to 1,000,000 by 1990/1. For
men
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,
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, the figure fluctuated. From 1,000,000 in 1970/1, they had dropped by almost 200,000 by 1980/1 but recovered slightly in numbers by 1990/1. Over the whole time period, the trend between
men
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 and
women
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 in part-time
education
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 reversed, with male
students
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 being greater in number in 1970/1 and female
students
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 taking pole position by 1990/1.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, education, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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