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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph illustrates how many male and female
students
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 were studying full-time and part-time in Britain during the years 1970/1, 1980/1 and 1990/1.
Overall
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, the number of
students
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 in full-time
education
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 increased over
this
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 time. With regard to part-time
education
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, there was a steady increase in
women
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 choosing to study part-time but for
men
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, the level fluctuated. Between the academic periods 1970/1 and 1990/1, the figures for
men
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 studying full-time grew in steady increments, beginning at 100,000 in 1970/1 and rising to nearly 300,000 in 1990/1. For
women
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, the numbers had
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 risen to around 300,000 by 1990/1 on an increasing trend. Notably,
however
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, the figure for females in full-time
education
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 in 1970/1 was roughly half that of
men
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, showing a greater take-up than
men
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 between 1970/1 and 1980/1. A different pattern is shown for part-time
education
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. The graph reveals a steady increase in
women
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 engaged in part-time study, rising from 750,000 in 1970/1 to 1,000,000 by 1990/1. For
men
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,
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, the figure fluctuated. From 1,000,000 in 1970/1, they had dropped by almost 200,000 by 1980/1 but recovered slightly in numbers by 1990/1. Over the whole time period, the trend between
men
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 and
women
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 in part-time
education
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 reversed, with male
students
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 being greater in number in 1970/1 and female
students
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 taking pole position by 1990/1.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, education, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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