Write about the following topic: Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Some
people
claim that if they
dont
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don't
eat
meat
or fish , they are
health
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healthy
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.
Moreover
, they think it is better for
world
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the world
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also
.But my experience is different with
this
idea and I disagree
compeletly
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completely
. I will explain
this
issue and my own opinion. The majority of
people
think
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think to
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avoid of eating
meat
is beneficial for their
health
as it
reduce
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reduces
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their
cholostrol
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cholesterol
. There are many
people
that are high
weight
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in weight
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in the world that
they
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apply
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do not eat any
meat
,
such
as fish and chicken.They eat vegetarian
instead
of
meat
and they believe plants are an
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exceptionally
exceptionaly
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exceptionally
good alternative
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to
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for
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to
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meat
.
Also
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Also,
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they think
this
tenchniqe
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technique
is useful for
environment
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the environment
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and
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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in the world.
Hence
, it causes animals get remain and continue their lives in a natural cycle.
As if
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animal
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animals
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vanish ,
environment
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the environment
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will
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be distrubt
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distrubt
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distribute
disrupt
as soon as possible.
Although
almost most of meats are full of fat , all of us need those because of energy and
portein
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protein
.
Aviding
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Avoiding
to eat any
meat
leads to
healthy
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health
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problems. In my experience , all
of
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apply
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food
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the food
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to illustrate ,
meat
, vegetarian and protein are essential for our body.
Last
year I decided to avoid
of
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apply
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meat
.
Therefore
after a few
times
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times,
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I got weak and I spent two weeks in the hospital.since my
portein
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protein
portion
of body.
on the other hand
, I am addicted to
meat
and it
affected
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affects
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on
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apply
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me in terms of psychology. I found every food is important and if
people
eat enough , there
is
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are
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no
any
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problems. In the
mean time
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meantime
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,
people
can burn extra fat in their bodies with exercise after eating
meat
.
To sum up
,
the
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a
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group of
people
believe
meat
causes
health's
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health
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problems but In my notion
that
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apply
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meat
is crucial like
another foods
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another food
other foods
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for
aur
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health
under conditions ,
such
as
eat
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eating
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enough
in
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at
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the
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a
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suitable time.
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