Write about the following topic: Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
Some
people
claim that if they dont
eat Correct your spelling
don't
meat
or fish , they are health
. Replace the word
healthy
Moreover
, they think it is better for world
Add an article
the world
also
.But my experience is different with this
idea and I disagree compeletly
. I will explain Correct your spelling
completely
this
issue and my own opinion.
The majority of people
think
avoid of eating Add the particle
think to
meat
is beneficial for their health
as it reduce
their Change the verb form
reduces
cholostrol
. There are many Correct your spelling
cholesterol
people
that are high weight
in the world that Change preposition
in weight
they
do not eat any Correct pronoun usage
apply
meat
, such
as fish and chicken.They eat vegetarian instead
of meat
and they believe plants are an Correct your spelling
exceptionally
exceptionaly
good alternative Correct your spelling
exceptionally
Change preposition
to
for
Change preposition
to
meat
. Also
they think Add a comma
Also,
this
tenchniqe
is useful for Correct your spelling
technique
environment
and Correct article usage
the environment
ecosystem
in the world. Correct article usage
the ecosystem
Hence
, it causes animals get remain and continue their lives in a natural cycle. As if
Correct word choice
If
animal
vanish , Fix the agreement mistake
animals
environment
will Add an article
the environment
Add a missing verb
be distrubt
distrubt
as soon as possible.
Correct your spelling
distribute
disrupt
Although
almost most of meats are full of fat , all of us need those because of energy and portein
. Correct your spelling
protein
Aviding
to eat any Correct your spelling
Avoiding
meat
leads to healthy
problems. In my experience , all Replace the word
health
of
Change preposition
apply
food
to illustrate , Add an article
the food
meat
, vegetarian and protein are essential for our body. Last
year I decided to avoid of
Change preposition
apply
meat
. Therefore
after a few times
I got weak and I spent two weeks in the hospital.since my Add a comma
times,
portein
of body. Correct your spelling
protein
portion
on the other hand
, I am addicted to meat
and it affected
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affects
on
me in terms of psychology. I found every food is important and if Change preposition
apply
people
eat enough , there is
no Change the verb form
are
any
problems. In the Correct quantifier usage
apply
mean time
, Correct your spelling
meantime
people
can burn extra fat in their bodies with exercise after eating meat
.
To sum up
, the
group of Correct article usage
a
people
believe meat
causes health's
problems but In my notion Change noun form
health
that
Correct word choice
apply
meat
is crucial like another foods
for Replace the adjective
another food
other foods
aur
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apply
health
under conditions , such
as eat
enough Wrong verb form
eating
in
Change preposition
at
the
suitable time.Correct article usage
a
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