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Topic: The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006

Topic: The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006
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The table data describes per-individual
potato
 consumption and total production of
this
 crop in five
diffirent
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different
 regions namely South and Central
America
, Africa, North
America
,
Europe
 and
Asia
 in the year 2006.
Overall
, it can be seen that
according to
 the information given, the citizens of
Europe
 ate more
potato
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potatoes
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 than the dwellers of other locations on
an
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apply
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average and
the
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Asia
 harvested the
most
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largest quantity of potatoes in 2006. In
further
details
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detail
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, Europeans were the chief consumers of
potato
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potatoes
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 in 2006
as well as
 other individuals
of
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in
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Europe
 used about 96,1 kilograms
yam
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of yam
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.
Then
.
in
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the areas of North
America
 and
Asia
 followed the second and the most noticeable user list of that crop including 57,9 and 25,8 kg per-person intake respectively.
Besides
, it is interesting to note that an average European in double
quality
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 of products than North
America
 and almost four times
more
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higher than that of
an
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Asian workers. Turning to the maintaining figures, the consumption in Africa was the
least
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lowest
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 point
closely
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close
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14
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to 14
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 kg
per-guy
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per guy
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,
whereas
 it
was stayed
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stayed
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 at 23,6 kg in South and Central
America
. The most significant feature following the given data is
Asia
, which
was
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showed the highest quantity of potatoes about 131,2 million tonnes despite their lower consumption rate.
Lastly
,
Europe
 grew up over 126 million tonnes of
potato
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potatoes
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 and there were two places that
becoming
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became
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 the main producers in the period of
year
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the year
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 2006.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words potato, america, europe, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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