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the tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006

the tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006
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contained in the two tables are the data on consumption and publishment of potatoes in five kinds of continents in 2006
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,it can be seen that the number of users who consumed
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 in Europe was the highest.
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, the number of products of
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 in Asia overcame that of
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 in Europe getting the first list. In terms of the consumption of potatoes in the world America was shouter than only Europe, which claimed the top spot, with 57.9kg , followed by consumers in Asia and South and Central America,with their respective figures being 25.8kg and 23.6kg respectively.In Africa,the consumers, with a modest figure of 14.1kg, occupied the
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 position in the group. In terms of the production of potatoes, Asia recorded the most consumers,with 131.2M. Marginally higher than the figure for European
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,numbering 126.3M. Especially,in three other countries ,with a modest figure of 24.7,16.4 and 15.6M,regarded as the lowest respectively

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yam, kg with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "modest" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural capacity
  • Dietary preferences
  • Cultural significance
  • Economic affordability
  • Trade policies
  • Food security
  • Production levels
  • Consumption patterns
  • Imbalance
  • Global agricultural trends
  • Technological advancements
  • Supply chain enhancements
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