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The table below shows the percentage of government spending on education and training and the participation of 18-24 years old in five countries in 2012.

The table below shows the percentage of government spending on education and training and the participation of 18-24 years old in five countries in 2012.
Contained in the table chart is information pertaining to the proportion of investing
on
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 education and training and
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 part in 18-24 years old in five nations during 2012. Units are measured in percentages. Generally speaking, the majority of
Slovenia
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 was the biggest
data
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 in the expenditure
rate
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. The
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of
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Poland
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 were the biggest
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participation
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rate
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, followed by
Slovenia
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. Romania and
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the Czech
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 Republic had
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similar
figures
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of
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participation
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the participation
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rate
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.
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,
Poland
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 had the smallest
data
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 in expenditure rather
than
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 other countries. Taking a closer look at the
figures
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of
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 the expenditure
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,
Slovenia
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 had the biggest proportion
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 at 25%. Romania and Hungary had
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similar
figures
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, at only 10% and 13% respectively. Below
this
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 level of spending were
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 Republic at 9% and
Poland
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5
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% which was the smallest figure
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 spending on education and training. Moving onto the participation
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, the figure of
Poland
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 was the biggest
data
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 at 44%, followed by the proportion of
Slovenia
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 at 40%. The percentage of Hungary reached
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34%.
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 Republic and Romania were similar at 27% and 23% respectively until 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words slovenia, data, rate, figures, poland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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