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the tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006.

the tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006.
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demonstrated in the tables are statistics on the production and consumption of potatoes in five areas around the world during 2006.
overall
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 , it can be seen that
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consumption of potatoes,
Europe
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in Europe
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 was the highest
while
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Africa
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in Africa
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 was the lowest, and in
production
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the production
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 of potatoes, Asia was the lowest in
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 group. beginning with consumption, Europe was the highest with 96,1
kg
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 but Africa was the lowest with 14,1
kg
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 south and central
America
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 and Asia were similar around 25
kg
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 and North
America
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 was the second most with 57,9
kg
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. turning to the remaining statistics , Asia was the highest in production with 131,2
million
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. the second biggest was Europe with 126,3
million
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 . south and Central
America
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 and Africa were similar around 16
million
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 .
finally
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 , North
America
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 was the third biggest with 24,7
million
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kg, america, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural capacity
  • Dietary preferences
  • Cultural significance
  • Economic affordability
  • Trade policies
  • Food security
  • Production levels
  • Consumption patterns
  • Imbalance
  • Global agricultural trends
  • Technological advancements
  • Supply chain enhancements
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