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THE BAR CHART SHOWS THE AVERAGE PRICES PER KILOMETRE OF CLOTHING IMPORTED INTO THE EUROPEAN UNION FROM SIX DIFFERENT COUNTRIES IN 1997 AND 2003.

THE BAR CHART SHOWS THE AVERAGE PRICES PER KILOMETRE OF CLOTHING IMPORTED INTO THE EUROPEAN UNION FROM SIX DIFFERENT COUNTRIES IN 1997 AND 2003.
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CONTAINED IN THE BAR
CHART
 IS DATA
THAT
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 THE AVERAGE PRICES PER KILOMETRE OF CLOTHING IMPORTED INTO THE EUROPEAN UNION FROM SIX
DIFFERNET
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DIFFERENT
 COUNTRIES BETWEEN 1997 AND 2003. THE DATA WERE RECORDED IN
POUNDS
.
OVERALL
, IT CAN BE SEEN THAT THE HIGHEST
CHART
 IN 1993 WAS ARGENTINA AND
BANGLADESH
 WAS THE LOWEST CLOTHING. TWO
CHART
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CHARTS
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IIN
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II IN
 1993 AND 2003
WEE
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WERE
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 DECREASED IN
BANGLADESH
 BUT THE
CHART
 IN 2003 MORE SMALLER THAN
CHART
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THE CHART
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 IN 1993. LOOKING AT THE DATA MORE CLOSELY, IT CAN BE OBSERVED THAT IN 1993, THE CLOTHING STARTED AT 28
POUNDS
 IN ARGENTINA AND DELINED QUICKLY TO 3
POUNDS
 IN
BANGLADESH
.
THIS
CHART
 IS NOT BIG CHANGED. TURNING TO THE REMAINING STATISTICS, THE FINAL
CHART
 IS IN 2003, IT STARTED AT ABOUT 26
POUNDS
THEN
 DECREASED DOWN UNTIL JAPAN AT 13
POUNDS
.
SUDDENDLY
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SUDDENLY
 IT RISED UP TO 17
POUNDS
 IN CHINA BUT
THEN
DELINCED
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DECLINED
 AGAIN TO
BANGLADESH
 AT ABOUT 6
POUNDS
.
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