The bar chart below shows the sector contributions tp India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000

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The percentage of India’s GDP is demonstrated by a bar chart. The data varies among gross domestic product for the period 1960-2000. The horizontal axis depicts years

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the vertical one – percentages.

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, it can be clearly seen that the trend of services increased over the years

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the agriculture

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decreased respectively. The industry

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was stable for the whole period. In 1960, the agriculture

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had the highest indicator of contribution, reaching 60%.

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, it started going down gradually over given years. From 1990 to 2000, it fell down twice and had the lowest point, having approximately 13%. The trend of services contribution showed almost the same percentage as the industry

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, having less than a fifth.

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, the trend grew steadily from 1960 to 2000, reaching the same percentage as the agriculture

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in 1960. The industry

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increased gradually from 1960 to 1980, having 30% and stayed stable up to 2000.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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4 paragraphs

156 words

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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions tp India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000

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