The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.
Overall
, the chart shows that the percent
of the Replace the word
percentage
food
is more than other items with men and women
. However
, the percent
of the Replace the word
percentage
food
of the boys and the girls
have
almost less than the other items. Verb problem
is
This
means that the adults care
more about the food
than the children do. The women
and the girls
actually do not care
about the electric equipment
much.
In the chart, the children have 10 percent
of the Change the spelling
per cent
food
, 23 percent
of electronic Change the spelling
per cent
equipment
, 39 percent
of the Change the spelling
per cent
music
, and 12 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
videos
. The boys have 9 percent
of the Change the spelling
per cent
food
, 18 percent
of electronic Change the spelling
per cent
equipment
, 38 percent
of the Change the spelling
per cent
music
, and 18 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
videos
. Correct article usage
the videos
Moreover
, the girls
have 11 percent
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per cent
with
the Change preposition
of
food
, 5 percent
with electronic Change the spelling
per cent
equipment
, 40
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and 40
percent
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per cent
of
the Change preposition
with
music
, and the
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apply
videos
. This
chart shows that the children, boys, and the girls
care
about other items more than the food
.
The adults have 25 percent
of the Change the spelling
per cent
food
, 5 percent
of electronic Change the spelling
per cent
equipment
, 5 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
music
and 1 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
videos
. Men have 14 percent
of the Change the spelling
per cent
food
, 10 percent
of electronic Change the spelling
per cent
equipment
, 5 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
music
, and 2 Add an article
the music
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
videos
. Women
have 39 percent
of the Change the spelling
per cent
food
, 1 percent
of electronic Change the spelling
per cent
equipment
, 5 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
music
, and 0.5 Add an article
the music
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
videos
. This
shows that the adults, men and women
care
more about food
than the other item
.Fix the agreement mistake
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