The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
The charts illustrate the number of
people
who were affected by four types of noise pollution
in
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day and night in
cities
and rural
areas
in 2007. The tendency that most
people
are affected by traffic, followed by
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and aircraft is the same in
the
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both
area
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areas
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.
Similarly
, the noises in the day seem more influential than those in the night both in
cities
and rural
areas
.
On the other hand
, the frequency that
people
are annoyed by them is almost double in
cities
of
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that
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in rural
areas
according to
the numbers per million, which is 75 per million in
cities
and 35 per million in rural
areas
.
In addition
, the number of
people
annoyed by the noise from industrial companies
are
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very little in
cities
whereas
it is zero in rural
areas
. As a whole, more
people
in
cities
are influenced by
noises
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noise
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than in rural
areas
.
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