The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
The charts illustrate the number of
people
who were affected by four types of noise pollution in
day and night in Change preposition
apply
cities
and rural areas
in 2007. The tendency that most people
are affected by traffic, followed by train
and aircraft is the same in Fix the agreement mistake
trains
the
both Remove the article
apply
area
.
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
Similarly
, the noises in the day seem more influential than those in the night both in cities
and rural areas
.
On the other hand
, the frequency that people
are annoyed by them is almost double in cities
of
Change preposition
apply
that
in rural Correct word choice
than
areas
according to
the numbers per million, which is 75 per million in cities
and 35 per million in rural areas
. In addition
, the number of people
annoyed by the noise from industrial companies are
very little in Correct subject-verb agreement
is
cities
whereas
it is zero in rural areas
.
As a whole, more people
in cities
are influenced by noises
than in rural Fix the agreement mistake
noise
areas
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