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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of thre types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of thre types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The diagrams
illustarte
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illustrate
 the percentage of
usuall
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usual
usually
 meals in
tree
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three
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 categories of nutrients, that could be unhealthy if used more than enough. The
amount
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 of using Sodium(s) and Saturated fat(
sf
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) are almost
in
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at
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 the same level. In
breakfast
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breakfast,
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 the
avrage
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average
 of using Sodium is 14% and in
sturated
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saturated
 fat and added sugar(ad)is 16%
also
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 the percentage of using
these item
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this item
these items
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 in lunch
in
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is
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order
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ordered
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 by S 29%,
Sf
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 26% and As 195 which is less than all of them.
In
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For
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 dinner S
used
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was used
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 by 43%,
Sf
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 37% and As by 23%
also
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, people have eaten
on
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apply
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their
snackes
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snacks
snakes
 meal 42% of Ad
wich
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which
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 is the biggest
amount
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 and
Sf
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 21% and the
littelest
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littlest
amount
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 was the S in
this
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 meal. In all of these 3
type
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types
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 added
suger
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sugar
 had the
littelest
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littlest
amount
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expet
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expect
 of
snacke
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snack
snake
snacks
 meals and the biggest number was for using sodium in dinner meals.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, sf with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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