The diagrams below show the development of the horse over a period of 40 million years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the development of the horse over a period of 40 million years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams present the 4 steps of the evolution procedure of horses regarding the variation of their feet over the past 40
million
years
.
Overall
, there are totally four time periods in the whole process, Eohippus,
Mesohippus
, Meryvhippus and
Horse
. The four stages were separated by 1
million
, 1.5
million
and 1.5
million
years
respectively. Forty
million
years
ago, one of the species of horses was called Eohippus,
which
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every horseshoe had five forks. Compared to modern horses, the Eohippus were very small. As for their appearance, some spots can be seen on their skin. 10
million
years
later, another type of
horse
called
Mesohippus
emerged. In
this
stage, the
Mesohippus
had a bigger body and one of the toes on their hooves was diminished into three. At the same time, the spots they originally had have
also
disappeared. The next stage was the emergence of Merychippus 15
million
years
ago. Compared to the
Mesohippus
, the Merychippus seemed taller and bigger. It can be noticed that their fur is darker and spotted. In
this
period, their hooves remain three-lobed.
Finally
, in modern times, the
horse
, as we are familiar with it, appeared. At
this
stage, the
horse
finished its development period and showed more obvious features. Houses are much stronger than the
last
evolution and their hooves are no longer separate, but one.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, years, mesohippus, horse with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolution
  • prehistoric
  • size progression
  • hoof development
  • toes transformation
  • limb elongation
  • species adaptation
  • significant change
  • comparative size
  • distinct differences
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