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The charts below show information on free-time activities taken by teenagers in a specific country both in 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show information on free-time activities taken by teenagers in a specific country both in 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart shows the free-time activities undertaken by teenagers in a specific country between 2009 and 2019.
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, it can be seen that sports accounted for the largest amount in 2009. The internet accounted for almost two-fifths of teenagers in 2019. In detail, music has the highest proportion with 24% and sports in a very similar proportion with 21% in 2009.
On the other hand
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, the large number of adolescents in 2019
focuses
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 on free activities, almost more than
two fifths
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 parts. followed by television with 32%. The rest of the categories had a more similar proportion in 2009,
such
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 as Television
with
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 19%, Cooking
with
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 16% and less than a fifth of Internet and Walking. The free time activities of adolescents in 2019
also
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 had similar percentages
such
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 as music at 18% and sports at 11%, a small minority in their free time did cooking and walking.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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