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The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied line graph illustrates how many
people
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 owned
cars
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 in
great
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Britain
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 over a
thirty seven-year
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period
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. A glance at the graph reveals that there was an upward trend for
people
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 who had two
cars
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 in
Britain
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.
However
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, the number of population who did not have any
cars
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 experienced a downward trend over the
period
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. In 1971, the percentage of
people
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 who had two
cars
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 was just under 10 per
cent
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 and It increased gradually and
then
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at the end
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 of the trend It was nearly %28 in 2007.
In contrast
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,the proportion of
people
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 who had no
cars
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 was roughly 50 per
cent
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 in the countries of
Britain
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 in 1971.(Which was the highest rate of no
cars
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 amount the
period
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).
Following
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this
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,the number of
people
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 who did not have any
cars
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 faced a modest decline and
rechead
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redhead
reached
 to approximately 25 per
cent
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 in
Britain
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 in 2007. As regards
to
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apply
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people
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 who had three or more
cars
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,It
initiated
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peaked
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 at just over 0 per
cent
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 in 1971.(Which was the lowest percentage over the whole
period
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).After that,
this
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 amount increased slightly and
finally
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 hit
to
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the nearby 8 per
cent
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 in England in 2007.
Moreover
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,the percentage of ownership
with
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of
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 one car witnessed a bit
fluctuation
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of fluctuation
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 at just around
of
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apply
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45 per
cent
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 between 1971 and 2007.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cars, britain, period, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • stable
  • percentage
  • significant decline
  • increase
  • decrease
  • growth rate
  • category
  • notable
  • analyze
  • ownership
  • comparative analysis
  • general trend
  • highlight
  • focus on
  • comparison
  • significant change
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