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The chart below gives about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart provides information about how households in
same
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the same
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 region waste their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.
To sum up
, meanwhile in 1968
food
 was the most money spent category from 8 categories and there
were
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was
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 no matching
section
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sections
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 that
can
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could
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 rival
food
, in 2018 the most fund spent section changed
into
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to
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leisure
 and housing and
food
are
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was
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 right behind
of
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apply
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leisure
.
Firstly
, The most
dollar allocated
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dollar-allocated
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 group in 1968
is
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was
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food
 with 35% of weekly income. There were no
rival
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rivals
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 that could withstand
food
, and all other groups were between 10% to 6% of weekly earnings.
On the contrary
, the least wasted categorization
were
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 fuel and power with 6%.
Secondly
, in 2018,
biggest
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the biggest
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 earnings allocated class
were
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was
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Leisure
 with 22% and after
leisure
 housing and
food
 came into the ranking just like
this
 numbering, with each holding 19% and 17%. After
top
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the top
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 3, the leftover groups were between 14% to 4%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, leisure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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