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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005
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The provided line graph illustrates how much money
spent
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 on
books
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 in four different countries
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 as Germany, France, Italy and Austria over the course of ten years, starting from 1995.
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, there was an increase in the spending/expenditure on
books
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 in all four nations examined, with Austria witnessing the most dramatic rise.
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, Germany generally had the highest figures throughout the
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 shown. In Germany, the amount of money spent on
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 at the beginning of the
period
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 started at 80
million
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dollars
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, after which it saw a gradual/steady/progressive rise to 90
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dollars
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 in 1999 before reaching a peak of 95
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dollars
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 6 years later.
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, just 30
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dollars
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 was invested in/spent on
books
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 in Austria in 1995, followed by a significant increase to just over=north of 70
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dollars
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at the end
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 of the
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. In 1995, the expenditure on
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 in France was
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55
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dollars
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, with a constant rise to around 75
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dollars
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 in 2015. A similar change can be seen in the figure for Italy, which increased from 50
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dollars
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 to just over 60
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dollars
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 toward the end of the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, period, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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