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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.
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The given chart illustrates the data of families
spendings
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spending
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with
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on
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 their weekly earnings in a particular country in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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,
food
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the food
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 category saw a significant reduction from 1968 to 2018. In contrarily, leisure and housing
spendings
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spending
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 showed
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 increase in 2018.
In addition
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,
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the amounted
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amounted
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amount
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 for household
goods
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steadily
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was steadily
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 unchanged. It can be seen
the
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from the
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 chart,
food
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that food
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spendings
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spending
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 had the highest percentage (exactly 35%) in 1968, and significantly decreased and reached around 17% in 2018.
Expense
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Expenses
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of
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for
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 housing and leisure were exactly 10% and just below the 10% in 1968 and increased in 2018, at just under
the
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apply
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20% and about 23% respectively.
On the other hand
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,
expenditure
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expenditures
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of
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on
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 fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
, household
goods
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 and personal
goods
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 did not exceed neither in 1968 nor in 2018.
Additionally
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,
it is clear that
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 spending on weekly income for household
goods
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remainly
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remained
remain
remains
 unchanged in both years at around 7%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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