Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problem. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individiuals can tackle these problems.

Nowadays,
population
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has increased around the world and because of that many areas which are generally urban have some
problems
about
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this
issue.
Although
numerous
problems
have arisen
as a result
of
this
, there are solutions.
This
issue will examine the
some
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causes of
the
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overpopulation and possible solutions
of
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this
problem
. One of the first
problem
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problems
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of overpopulation is pollution
such
as air,
water
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and water
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and it
effects
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affects
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environment
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the environment
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and natural places in the urban areas.
Due to
increasing of the population, many natural places are destroyed and many structures or factories are built
instead
of them. So, most of
habitats
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the habitats
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are
effected
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affected
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with
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pollution. Another serious
problem
might be the growing
traffic
problems
. As the number of people increases, the number of vehicles
also
rise
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.
In addition
, many people prefer to use their cars in order to go to work.
Therefore
, there is a lot of
traffic
on the roads at certain
time
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times
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of the day. It is important that action is taken to combat these
problems
. The government should control the pollution and it can
be find
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find
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a solution
about
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non-planned urbanization.
For instance
, the government should bring some rules which are about planning structures.
Thus
, the number of
the
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buildings might be decreased.
On the other hand
,
government
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the government
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should
orgazine
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organzine
organize
organise
traffic
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a traffic
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system. Use of public must be increased.
Moreover
, people should be directed to
this
issue.
For example
, train and bus services may be increased, especially in the mornings or during heavy
traffic
time. In conclusion, overpopulation is
very
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a very
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big
problem
for many cities.
However
, individuals and the state can offer a solution to
this
by taking precautions.
Thus
,
this
problem
will be prevented.
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the topic effectively by identifying two major problems caused by overpopulation and providing solutions. To improve, make sure to deepen your analysis and provide more specific examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear logical structure by making sure each paragraph links smoothly to the next. In some parts, the flow of ideas could be more coherent. Use transition words like 'Moreover,' 'Furthermore,' and 'In addition' to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which effectively frame the discussion on the issue of overpopulation.
task achievement
The main points are clear and relevant to the topic, demonstrating a good understanding of the issue and potential solutions.

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