Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problem. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individiuals can tackle these problems.
Nowadays,
population
has increased around the world and because of that many areas which are generally urban have some Add an article
the population
problems
about
Change preposition
with
this
issue. Although
numerous problems
have arisen as a result
of this
, there are solutions. This
issue will examine the some
causes of Correct quantifier usage
apply
the
overpopulation and possible solutions Correct article usage
apply
of
Change preposition
to
this
problem
.
One of the first problem
of overpopulation is pollution Change to a plural noun
problems
such
as air, water
and it Correct word choice
and water
effects
Replace the word
affects
environment
and natural places in the urban areas. Add an article
the environment
Due to
increasing of the population, many natural places are destroyed and many structures or factories are built instead
of them. So, most of habitats
are Add an article
the habitats
effected
Correct your spelling
affected
with
pollution. Another serious Change preposition
by
problem
might be the growing traffic
problems
. As the number of people increases, the number of vehicles also
rise
. Correct subject-verb agreement
rises
In addition
, many people prefer to use their cars in order to go to work. Therefore
, there is a lot of traffic
on the roads at certain time
of the day.
It is important that action is taken to combat these Fix the agreement mistake
times
problems
. The government should control the pollution and it can be find
a solution Change the verb form
find
about
non-planned urbanization. Change preposition
to
For instance
, the government should bring some rules which are about planning structures. Thus
, the number of the
buildings might be decreased. Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, government
should Add an article
the government
orgazine
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organzine
organize
organise
traffic
system. Use of public must be increased. Correct article usage
a traffic
Moreover
, people should be directed to this
issue. For example
, train and bus services may be increased, especially in the mornings or during heavy traffic
time.
In conclusion, overpopulation is very
big Add an article
a very
problem
for many cities. However
, individuals and the state can offer a solution to this
by taking precautions. Thus
, this
problem
will be prevented.Submitted by svdnruslu on
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the topic effectively by identifying two major problems caused by overpopulation and providing solutions. To improve, make sure to deepen your analysis and provide more specific examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear logical structure by making sure each paragraph links smoothly to the next. In some parts, the flow of ideas could be more coherent. Use transition words like 'Moreover,' 'Furthermore,' and 'In addition' to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which effectively frame the discussion on the issue of overpopulation.
task achievement
The main points are clear and relevant to the topic, demonstrating a good understanding of the issue and potential solutions.