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Task 1: The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph describes the development in the percentages of
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
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owns
Correct subject-verb agreement
own
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cars
 in one European nation from 1971 to 2001.
Overall
, there was a decrease in
households
 not
cars
,
while
 the
percentages
Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
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 of
people
had
Correct pronoun usage
who had
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cars
 significantly
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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.The
percentage
 of
households
 owning
two
 cas fluctuated from 1971 to 2001. Speaking of, the
percentage
 of
people
 who did not have
cars
 fell from 50% in 1971 to almost 40% in 1981.
By contrast
, there was a noticeable increase in the
percentage
 of
people
 owning
two
cars
 from approximately 20% to 30%.
While
 the amount of
people
 owning one car decreased slightly from 36% in 1971 to 34% in 1981. Over the next decade, the
percentage
 of
households
 that had
two
cars
 increased dramatically from 21% in 1991 to approximately 31% in 2001
while
this
 figure
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% remained unchanged with the number of
people
 who did not own
cars
 in the past
two
 decades. There was a slight decrease from 50% in 1981 to 47% in 1991 with the
households
 having one car.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, households, people, percentage, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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