The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for suagr form sugar canes .

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for suagr form sugar canes .
The given diagram illustrates how is
sugar
manufactured from
sugar
canes
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cane
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.
Overall
,it can be seen that there are 7 steps for making finished
sugar
.Begining
withg
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with
growing
sugar
canes
and ending with drying and cooling.
To begin
with
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the first
step
where
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is where
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the
sugar
canes
are planted .After 12-18 months , the employees will harvest them by
hands
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hand
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or special machines.The third
step
is crushing, the
sugar
canes
are put into the crushed machine to get
juice
.
The next
step
is
juice
is poured
to
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a limestone filler to
purifying
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purify
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. Turning to the
last
3 steps of
this
process.After purifying,
juice
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the juice
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will be heated by a huge evaporator,
then
juice
becomes syrup.In the following
step
, the syrup of
juice
is inserted into a centrifuge and
sugar
crystals are separated.
Finally
,crystals are dried and cooled in a container,
then
they become finished
sugar
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, canes, step, juice with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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