The world of work is rapidly changing and employees cannot depend on having the same work or the same work conditions for life. Discuss the possible causes and suggest ways to prepare for people to work in the future.

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In
this
day and age, it is a common belief that Working people cannot maintain
the
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job
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and have to change to adapt to the world. In
this
discussion
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I will explain the reasons for these changes and offer solutions so people can prepare for the future. On the one hand, There are many reasons for
this
change.
Firstly
, technology is increasingly developing,
this
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leads to unemployment and difficulty maintaining their jobs.
For example
, The workforce will be replaced by machines that work faster and more efficiently.
Secondly
, Companies wishing to reduce costs may cut staff or reduce
workers
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salaries, which will make it difficult for workers to maintain their jobs.
Moreover
, the development of technology
such
as the
internet
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has
also
led to fewer jobs and fewer goods being produced.
For instance
, newspapers will no longer be popular because users tend to read online rather than read newspapers.
On the other hand
, to adapt to
this
change, employees need to prepare well for the future.
Besides
,
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labor
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force
need
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to quickly adapt and be more flexible.
For example
, working with different environments, being ready to work remotely, having a flexible working environment, and keeping up with trends quickly.
Furthermore
, The government needs to take measures to prevent
this
substitution
such
as introducing
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and protection laws
as well as
providing appropriate educational training programs for the people.
To sum up
, the world of work is constantly changing, so each individual needs to know how to approach to avoid being eliminated from the job they are doing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence
  • gig economy
  • freelance
  • contract work
  • globalization
  • interconnected economy
  • work-life balance
  • market instability
  • economic fluctuations
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