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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one? Do you agree or disagree ?

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Some people believe that spending your time working
on
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 a large
company
 than a small
company
 offers much more benefits and
overall
 is better than the compensation you get in a small
company
. Working in a big
enterprise
 and a tiny
enterprise
 each has
it's
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 own benefits and losses.
However
, a few groups believe that working in a big
enterprise
 offers much more in general for workers than those who work in a tiny
enterprise
. Having a job in a huge brand might be able to make you seem more reliable, and trusted to
others
 who are currently searching for employees, as working in a huge brand comes with the popularity of the brand, making it seem that an individual
such
 as yourself is loyal and trusted, that even a successful,
well known
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company
 in the industry was willing to take you in. You are able to put in that you worked at
this
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 establishment, which will cause managers to think of you more highly and put in more thought in your job offer. Working in
such
 a place will
also
 likely give you a task that doesn't require much knowledge,
such
 as becoming a manager, and
instead
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 you will only have to do
labor
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 rather than having to manage
others
 and
taking
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 care of the whole place.
However
, to some,
this
 is a disadvantage rather than an advantage as you would get less experience in jobs and you would get less knowledge. Working one of the easier tasks,
such
 as just doing
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,
also
 usually comes with a lower wage than
others
 in a much higher position than you. There would
also
 be
others
 who do the exact same job as yours, making it significantly harder for you to get noticed by the higher-ups and get a promotion. You would have to try much harder and have a competition with the other employees to get a promotion and a higher role in the establishment.
Overall
, working in each place has
it's
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 own advantages and disadvantages. I personally believe that working for a small
company
 is better, as there would be less competition with
others
, you are
also
 able to develop a much
more
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closer relationship with your fellow co-workers
,
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 and develop a nice
enviroment
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environment
 inside the office. You are
also
 able to reach higher positions much more easily, and gain more experience and
knowlegde
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knowledge
overall
.
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task achievement
Your response would benefit from more specific examples to support your points. For example, you could mention specific roles or industries where working in a large company might offer concrete advantages (like better training programs or international experience).
task achievement
Ensure that your arguments are balanced. You mainly focused on the disadvantages of working in a large company and the advantages of working in a small company, which could give a biased perspective. Including more balanced viewpoints will make your essay more comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Work on connecting your ideas more fluidly. Sometimes, the transition between sentences and paragraphs feels abrupt. Consider using transition words and phrases to better link your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Your essay would benefit from a more structured format. Try following the PEEL (Point, Evidence, Explanation, Link) method to ensure each paragraph has a clear structure and supports your main thesis.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction effectively introduces the debate, clearly stating the differing opinions on the topic.
coherence cohesion
You provided a clear conclusion, summarizing your main points and stating your personal opinion, which nicely rounds off your essay.
task achievement
You identified several key points related to working in large vs small companies, demonstrating a clear understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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