Some people say that all people should stay in full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Individuals believe that all

students

under 18 years old have to

study

full-

time

.

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writer disagrees with

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as offspring suffer from a lack of social skills and easily get under pressure. It is vital to understand that

students

nowadays spend too much

time

studying because the school schedule is full. From prior knowledge, making admission under 18

study

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full-

time

is quite cruel because

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students not

studentsnot

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students

just need homework to read and do, but they

also

need to have

time

for outdoor

activities

to

gain

experience

and social skills

such

as communicating, finding out how society works, does it look the same

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what they have been taught

.

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As a result

, spending a whole day studying

study

causes

students

to suffer from a lack of

experience

.

For example

, a pupil who learns too much information about knowledge and

gain

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too much information will probably not be as good as a student who combines

study

and internship every day to

gain

experience

from society and of

course

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the student who pays more attention to learning does not have enough

time

to participate in social

activities

to

gain

social skills and

experience

in the future. Another key component is that

children

easily get under pressure and

depression

. Staying in a full-

time

education,

students

must work hard, do homework and especially must

competitive

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with their classmates.

Consequently

,

students

must tolerate the pressure they have to get high scores on exams and how to keep up with other

students

in their class.

For instance

, making

children

study

full-

time

and not allowing them to participate in outdoor

activities

will lead to the problem that the

children

will suffer from

depression

, and cannot handle the full-

time

schedule of learning anymore and

this

leads to

depression

and even bad behaviour.

Moreover

,

depression

over a long period can

also

cause offspring to commit crimes, doing bad things that are dangerous to people around them. In conclusion,

student

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students

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should not be in full-

time

education

due to

the drawback it brings back for

children

.

Therefore

,

children

under 18 should learn and

also

spend

time

participating in social

activities

in order not to suffer from

depressionand

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depression and

lack of

experience