Some people say that all people should stay in full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Individuals believe that all

students

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under 18 years old have to

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full-

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writer disagrees with

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as offspring suffer from a lack of social skills and easily get under pressure. It is vital to understand that

students

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nowadays spend too much

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studying because the school schedule is full. From prior knowledge, making admission under 18

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study

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full-

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is quite cruel because

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students not

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students

just need homework to read and do, but they

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need to have

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for outdoor

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to

gain

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experience

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and social skills

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as communicating, finding out how society works, does it look the same

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what they have been taught

.

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, spending a whole day studying

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causes

students

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to suffer from a lack of

experience

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.

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, a pupil who learns too much information about knowledge and

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gain

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too much information will probably not be as good as a student who combines

study

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and internship every day to

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experience

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from society and of

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the student who pays more attention to learning does not have enough

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to participate in social

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to

gain

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social skills and

experience

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in the future. Another key component is that

children

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easily get under pressure and

depression

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. Staying in a full-

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education,

students

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must work hard, do homework and especially must

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with their classmates.

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,

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must tolerate the pressure they have to get high scores on exams and how to keep up with other

students

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in their class.

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, making

children

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study

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full-

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and not allowing them to participate in outdoor

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will lead to the problem that the

children

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will suffer from

depression

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, and cannot handle the full-

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schedule of learning anymore and

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leads to

depression

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and even bad behaviour.

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,

depression

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over a long period can

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cause offspring to commit crimes, doing bad things that are dangerous to people around them. In conclusion,

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should not be in full-

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education

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the drawback it brings back for

children

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.

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,

children

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under 18 should learn and

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spend

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participating in social

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in order not to suffer from

depressionand

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depression and

lack of

experience

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