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Governments in many countries have recently introduced special taxes on foods and beverages with high levels of sugar. Some think these taxes are a good idea while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#governments #countries #taxes #foods #beverages #levels #sugar #think #idea
There is no denying the fact that
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authorities
 put
taxes
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 food that
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 a high level of sugar.
While
 it is
commonly
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 held belief that
government
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the government
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 in some countries has specific
taxes
 on food.There is no
orgument
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argument
 that opposes it, in my opinion , I consider that
taxes
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 perfect idea
otherwise
 in food or other things.
To begin
 with , I think that
taxes
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good way to
handel
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handle
 our income.
In other words
,
taxes
 make
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us
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 buy less and that will help us to maintain the
Buget
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Budget
.
In addition
 , some
people
 with little income will have
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 facing their own budget. Another point to consider, the health and it is
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absolutely a great way for
people
 with diets and with
people
 that have more
wight
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weight
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. That will decrease their
deaseas
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diseases
disease
 and that will make their lifestyle better and more healthier. In conclusion, despite
people
 having different views,
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 believe that
taxes
is
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 making a difference in
peoples
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 is life in different ways.
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, use clearer paragraph divisions. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and be unified around that idea.
task achievement
Strengthen your task achievement by providing more specific examples and explanations to support your main points.
task achievement
Make sure to thoroughly address both sides of the argument in detail before stating your opinion. This will help demonstrate a complete response.
coherence cohesion
Work on your sentence structure and grammar. Pay particular attention to subject-verb agreement and proper use of prepositions.
task achievement
The essay recognizes the two perspectives on taxing sugary foods and beverages, showing an awareness of the topic's complexity.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion summarizes the writer's position effectively.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • processed foods
  • punitive measures
  • revenue
  • public health campaigns
  • awareness
  • government overreach
  • personal freedoms
  • unhealthy diets
  • economic burden
  • sugar-related health issues
  • consumer behavior
  • taxation
  • high levels of sugar
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