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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries, living in cities from 1972 to 2020, prediction for 2030, and 2040. summarise to information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries, living in cities from 1972 to 2020, prediction for 2030, and 2040. summarise to information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the amount of people who
lives
Correct subject-verb agreement
live
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 in cities
among
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in
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Use synonyms
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand,
Indonesia
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and Indonesia
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, during the period from 1970 to 2020, with the future view in 20 years.
Overall
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, all of
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this
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these
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 four countries have
the
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an
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increase
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increasing
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 trend. First of all, the figure
of
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for
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 Malaysia, starting at 30% in 1970, over that of
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 after 1990, became the highest one in the
further
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 50 years, at approximately 80% in 2040,
while
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 the category of
Philippines
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, which rand first at the beginning, dropped to the third in the end, just a little above a half. On the opposite, Indonesia,
as
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at
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 the bottom at
first,
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account
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accounted
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of
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for
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 it reached just below 30% in 2000
as well as
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 that of Thailand, and
then
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 dramatically to higher than 40%, the same figure
with
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as
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 that of
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Philippines
Correct article usage
the Philippines
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, ultimately ranked at the second one in three decades.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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