You eat in your college cafeteria everyday lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college manager . In your letter, •explain what you like about the cafeteria •say what is wrong with it •suggest how it could be improved

Dear Sir or Madam, Greetings of the day. I am Dinesh. I am in my final year and from the law department. I
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regular customer
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the past 4 years. So, I am suggesting
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improvements out of my experience. Our cafeteria offers
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varieties
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of food. Since we have students from all over the world, menus are regularly updated based on the student's inputs. There are no concerns with the range of food. But the
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hygiene
in the cafeteria has come down drastically. people working in the cafeteria
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not adhering to the
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there was
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improvement
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. The rules are not being
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followed
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even though
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task achievement
You have provided a clear explanation of what you like about the cafeteria and what is wrong with it. However, make sure that the letter covers all aspects of the task by giving a detailed suggestion on how these issues can be improved.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by ensuring a smooth flow of ideas throughout the letter. For instance, explain what you like first, then what is wrong, and finally your suggestions for improvement.
coherence cohesion
Ensure the paragraphs are focused on single ideas to maintain clarity and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to the closing salutation to ensure it matches the polite and formal tone of the letter.
task achievement
You have used a suitable writing tone which is appropriate for a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
The closing is polite and appropriately formal.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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