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The chart below shows the percentage of young people at university in six European countries in 2000 and 2007.

The chart below shows the percentage of young people at university in six European countries in 2000 and 2007.
Contained in the graph is information pertaining to the proportion of youngsters from six European nations who continued studying
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 University from 2000 to 2007. From an observational perspective, it can be seen that Italy, UK and Poland witnessed an upward trend
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 the opposite was true for Spain and Norway.
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, it was Finland's
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 that remained intact. Looking at the illustration in
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 detail, Poland had 64% of teenagers participated in university and it increased to 78% in 2007, making Poland a country with the highest rate of all.
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, there was a rise in Italy and
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 figures from 38% and 46% to 52% and 54% respectively. Turning to the remaining groups, Norway began at 66% before decreasing by 1% during the next 8 years. Regarding Spain, it experienced a slight decline from 46% to 41%.
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, throughout the timeframe, there was no change in Finland's percentage (70%).

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