The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and ,are comparisons where relevant.
The pie illustrates the percentage of online shopping sales for travel,film/music,books, and clothes in New Zealand between 2003 and 2013.
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sector is travel.We can clearly see that travel accounted the 36 per cent of these four parts in 2003 and slightly dropped to 29% in 2013.
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