Museums and art gallaries should concentrate on works that show histroy and culture of their own country rather than works of the other parts in the world. To what extent to do you agree or disagree?

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

179 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

guardians of heritage
foster
sense of identity
cultural preservation
authentic experiences
cross-cultural understanding
global perspective
artistic styles
historical contexts
innovation
globalized world
cultural exchange
eclectic collections
diverse audiences

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