Museums and art gallaries should concentrate on works that show histroy and culture of their own country rather than works of the other parts in the world. To what extent to do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
the
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art
gallaries
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galleries
and
museum
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museums
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are becoming one of the destination
place
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to visit
on
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in
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free
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time or
place
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to relax from the stress when working. About the content in the
museum
and
art
gallaries
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galleries
, some people think that it is better
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by the works related to the
nation
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history
and
culture
rather than the other
nation
. In my opinion, I firmly agree with
this
view since
this
thing has several positive benefits. As the
museum
and
art
gallaries
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galleries
is
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are
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the
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one
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of
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mediums to use to
sharing
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about
the
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history
and
culture
, it is important for
new
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generation to know about the
history
and
culture
of their
nation
. I think
this
function can
be works
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,
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if the
museum
and
art
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galleries
gallaries
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galleries
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offer
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offers
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the visitors
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the
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works related
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to
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with
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to
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history
and
culture
from locals.
Beside
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as
the
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a
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place
to inform about
the
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culture
and
history
, the
museum
and
art
gallaries
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galleries
can be used as a
place
to conserve
the
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history
and
culture
. Many museums are used to store
the
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important things containing historical stories about the
nation
.
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