The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The flowchart illustrates the process of making carbonated drinks from the very beginning.
Overall
, there are 5 stages from raw water
until it is ready to distribute to the supermarket.
The first stage starts with purifying the water
. It involves 3 steps, where the raw water
will be processed into the filtering machine
, softening machine
, and mixing machine
respectively. After
this
process, the water
will be pumping
into the electric heaters. In Change the form of the verb
pumped
this
machine
, the water
will be evaporated, then
it will transfer with the cooling pipe into a
storage where it will be mixed with the carbon dioxide.
Remove the article
apply
Furthermore
, the carbonated water
will be transfered
again to a tank where it will be combined with other chemicals, Correct your spelling
transferred
such
as colouring chemicals, syrups, and flavour chemicals. Moreover
, the mixed carbonated water
will be filtered again, and after that
it will be poured into the bottles and cans. And Add a comma
that,
the
Correct article usage
apply
lastly
, the bottles and cans will be packaged and transfered
to the supermarkets.Correct your spelling
transferred
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