All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackled?
A generation ago, we
also
faced the problem Linking Words
with
obesity. Change preposition
of
However
, count of people who have issues with fatness is growing. Linking Words
This
essay will look at the core reasons for Linking Words
this
and propose some solid solutions.
One of the main Linking Words
cause
of the problem is that people eat greasy and insalubrious food. By Fix the agreement mistake
causes
this
I mean they are eating burgers, fried potato and drinking soda etc. All previous actions with food lead to Linking Words
have
issues with your weight and health. Unnecessary verb
apply
For example
, when I was at school I always saw how my classmate bought 3 small Linking Words
pizza
and some drinks, Fix the agreement mistake
pizzas
obviously
he had complications with fatness. The solution is simple Add a comma
obviously,
to
eat less oily Fix the infinitive
apply
meal
.
Another Fix the agreement mistake
meals
trouble
is that people who eat unhealthy eats don’t like any activities. Correct your spelling
problem
That is
to say after eating something they go to Linking Words
the
bed or Correct article usage
apply
go for
Verb problem
apply
the
watch TV, Correct article usage
apply
thus
Linking Words
you
getting fat faster. To tackle Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
issue, after your meal, you should go for a walk for at least Linking Words
for
10-15 minutes.
A third cause of the trouble is the addiction Change preposition
apply
for
eating Change preposition
to
much
food. To be more precise, you always want to eat. You will never know when Rephrase
too much
your
wish to eat be at 2am, midday or 9pm. Correct pronoun usage
you
As a result
, you eat so much and can not lose your weight. The way forward could be Linking Words
create
a schedule when you eat.
Fix the infinitive
to create
To sum up
, the bigger amount of complications with obesity, Linking Words
Linking Words
due
to Add a missing verb
are due
the
reasons Correct article usage
apply
such
as eating greasy and insalubrious eats, laziness and Linking Words
do
not having any plans Unnecessary verb
apply
how
to rid of your addiction. Change preposition
on how
This
is a serious dilemma, and unless you won’t try to handle it by eating less fat feed and doing activities you don’t have any chances to lose weight. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the dilemma lies with themselves and their desire Linking Words
for solving
Change preposition
to solve
this
issue.Linking Words
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grammar vocabulary
Work on grammar and word choice to avoid awkward or unclear phrases (e.g., 'count of people who have issues with fatness' should be 'the number of people struggling with obesity').
task response
To strengthen task response, ensure each point is clearly linked back to how it contributes to rising obesity. Be explicit about the connection.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps the reader understand the main points and overall argument.
content
Several relevant causes and possible solutions for obesity are identified and explained.
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